Writer's Journal #9

I did the peer review myself. I found it kind of unexpected that I was able to express everything I wanted to within my paragraphs but some thing that I was unaware of was how much clearer I needed to be of what I was talking about. What stood out to me was the fact that I answered every question but I didn’t provide the details that people needed, like the background of what I was talking about. Like no one else works in my company so I need to be very specific. After both giving and receiving feedback on my writing project number one draft I realize that before I submit the final draft I need to make some minor adjustments. I need to look back and see where I am talking about something that only I would know and maybe elaborate on that. I will accomplish this by going back and rereading my essay and seeing different areas. Maybe reading out loud would help as well.

Considering I had a busy schedule and I waited until five hours before the deadline I have very little time to make huge adjustments but luckily I have just enough to make the adjustments I need to make. I believe that I answered every question necessary for the assignment but I still need to make some minor edits like adding clarity and making more sense to the general audience I will be speaking to.

The first step I will take is a reading over my essay out loud and reading it from the angle of a person listening to my project proposal. My audience that is going to be listening to this does not know about my company or where I work or how things are done there so I need to look back and see what I have to specify. I noticed that I mentioned walled Lake but I didn’t provide any background to what exactly Walled Lake is. Walled Lake is the city I currently live in Michigan. So I will have to make that adjustment as well. I do not think I have many changes to make but I also do not have a multimodal image which I still need to find and have the source for it as well.