Writer's Journal #9

I did my on peer review because my peers are taking awhile to do mine. I thought it was interesting to be the person on the outside looking in. I saw that I needed to make my writing more like a narrative and less like a school project. I needed more me in my project.

I am kind of in a rush because I started the class so late but I think most of my essay is complete but I need to add a few minor tweaks. It will not be a problem.

My Edit Goals:

1. “I had to write a persuasion paper of whatever subject I wanted to write about.” What was this? Condense a little more.

2. “I realize now, with writing, we have the power to make people listen by what and how we write.” Can you provide examples?

3. “Most people want to naturally believe what you are saying yet there are some people that are happy to make up any myths to get you on their side.” There are too many “you” versus “I”

4. “They needed to see that I am strong just based off the wording I used” Maybe better wording here

5. Condense the last conclusion paragraph